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My innocence is lost
one night, I lost this treasure
I thought to be ready
I thought being loved

but for him, I was a bitch
for him, I was a toy
the love had disappeared

I regret this night
I regret my impatience

Today I am a princess without crown
a teenager at heart injured
which seeks forgot this day
a first time
a first disappointment
the love is hard
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FullMetalFroggie Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Professional Artist
A strong start. The second verse would be more powerful written in the present tense rather than past, "But for Him, I am a bitch - For Him, I am a toy - The love has disappeared", also there seem to be some missing words and punctuation towards the end of the poem, I do not know if this is intentional, to portray a broken state of mind, if so it could be exaggerated further. Overall a nice idea for a poem.
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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
yes,this was the idea
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CarmenVeloso Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This deviation has been added to the group's favourites.
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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012
thanks:)
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BeautifulAdmiration Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ver powerful and very deep.
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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
thanks:)
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BeautifulAdmiration Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Your welcome. :)
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Polish-Princess Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is a very powerful piece that I can also relate to. Well written :heart:
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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012
thanks:)
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Awayfromtrouble Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That happens
But you can do something about it
Pray
:)
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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012
thanks
I will pray
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Awayfromtrouble Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Must be painfull though
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Uziel-De-Winther Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
A well written piece your emotion breaks trough clearly good job :) or and Your crown is in your heart not your vagina :) and so is your purity, and with the first lesson learned you can truly start on your journey towards all the more warmer aspects of love and sex :) remember it takes two to tango he is maybe even more dirty since he just used you.. nevertheless remember the term is pure of heart not pure of vagina :)
and Eyesofiris is right love comes to us all :) even geeky me found it :)
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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
I appreciate your opinion
thanks you for the advice and support

:)
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Uziel-De-Winther Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
your velcome :) blessed be las and good luck :)
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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
thanks:)
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maiko-raivaru Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012
You know, Innocence is not just a sexual thing. I'm long past virginity but i'd say i'm innocent of most of life's difficulties still... thankfully. One only has to watch the news to see that. As to love... the best thing to do is to act for you on behalf of you and not rely on anyone else's emotions. People are puzzles... but sex isn't a puzzle, it's just plain great :D
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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
you are right for innocence
your comment is very interest

thanks:)
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TRexyBusiness Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
A very well-written, powerful poem.
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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012
thanks
this is nice
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TRexyBusiness Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Of course! No problem.
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cskadoz Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012   General Artist
voice tone & rhythm :headbang: :woohoo: :boogie: this rocks!
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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012
thanks:)
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TypingTurtle Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The subject is beautifully given :love:
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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012
thank you

glad you like:)
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EyesofIris Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I can relate to this too well... On the bright side, you're not broken, dirty, gross or anything like that. You're just not a virgin anymore. I know it really is terrible when you love someone and when they say it back it's just a lie. On the other side, someone will love you one day. I'm proof. =]
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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012
thank you for your opinion
and of sharing your experience;)
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