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she dances in her cage
trapped in this place
her destiny is spoiled

every night she reveals her body
in a stench of alcohol, and of nachos
she takes not
attention to customers

she makes the show on scene
as if the room was empty
as if she was alone in this world

every night she thinks
it's the last time
but the next day
she dances again and again

escape this reality
is a difficult thing
because dancing is her life
she dances in hell
escape from this life
is very hard
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Gandalfgirl579 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, this is just lovely! :heart:
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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013
thanks :D
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Gandalfgirl579 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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Be-Back-Soon Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful. Great work!
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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012
:)
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LauraBeez Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i like the concept. And your poem, too. It shows how hard can be making decisions, neing brave, losing everything just to escape.
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:iconkatsumoto82:
katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012
I think the decisions are always hard

thank you to you:)
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aliforever331 Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this, interesting concept...a girl trapped by her dancing
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:iconkatsumoto82:
katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012
thanks:)
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aliforever331 Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome :)
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Student Writer
Hm, interesting concept, excellent portrayal of the character and the poem really touches the reader on a personal level. Although I think she should find another place to dance ^_^
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:iconkatsumoto82:
katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012
I think also
that the place is not ideal

thanks :squee:
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:iconlightoverpowers58:
LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012  Student Writer
You are most welcome ^_^
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VeiledPoet Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Uploaded in December? I guess im late.

Tho i suppose you cant be late for great poetry, eh?
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:iconkatsumoto82:
katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2012
sorry
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Chaotic-Oasis Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very well done, and it really invokes a draw to her and her emotions about the whole thing. Instant :+fav:!

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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2012
thank you, she is lost
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Chaotic-Oasis Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You are welcome.

Aren't we all? At least in some part?

(wow, look at me being all deep and stuff, lol)

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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2012
i think yes
we seek the right way lol
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NecRoKreatriX Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Good poem, alcohol and nachos is an awesome combo.
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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2012
thanks :dance:
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:iconelle-julianna:
Elle-Julianna Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012
Love the nice twist in the end.
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:iconkatsumoto82:
katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012
this is a passion
even if the place is creepy
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FireBasedKiller4913 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2012
i think its awsome, but i must laugh (not harshly) a little because of the random 'nachos'.
:iconsorryplz:
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:iconkatsumoto82:
katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2012
this is my next comedy in the drama
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FireBasedKiller4913 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012
XD well it is very good
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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012
thanks
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KwatzHeWrote Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Nice piece. Just a suggestion: I didn't like much the verses that follow the ones that start with "escape from this ...", which I find a bit less expressive, so why don't you try to say the same thing in a more detailed way?
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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2012
I will look
to do even better
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SleepyRussian Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
.. Touching.
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katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2012
thank you:handshake:
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patmp Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
So real. Well done. :)
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:iconkatsumoto82:
katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2012
thank you
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Lillian13 Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2011  Student Writer
Damn, I feel bad for that person. There's another that I know of that wishes to go down this path.
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Whispersareheard Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I think it is a reality...
Thank you for writing this.
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:iconkatsumoto82:
katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2011
I think also:w00t:

no problem;p
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Charmed-Ravenclaw Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
This tells an interesting story. Well done.
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:iconkatsumoto82:
katsumoto82 Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2011
thanks
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